Enjoying some of this old stuff! Old or no, it's still gold you know.
Regarding the cigarette quote, I think your version actually works better for a piece like this. The way it's phrased the last line is almost like a punchline. Like how when you're reading a comic they save the main pun for the last frame. It leads you to the 'I'm not a quitter' thing perfectly.
Cyberdevil
Enjoying some of this old stuff! Old or no, it's still gold you know.
Regarding the cigarette quote, I think your version actually works better for a piece like this. The way it's phrased the last line is almost like a punchline. Like how when you're reading a comic they save the main pun for the last frame. It leads you to the 'I'm not a quitter' thing perfectly.
Spicy-cheetos
Glad you like it.